Tuesday, 10 November 2015

Miriama's Prove It Writing


I will prove that I can use simple and compound sentences correctly and some complex sentences. Write a description of an image showing you can use the above features correctly.


As the bright yellow sneaky sun was rising, the wind was gusting through. All of the dandelions were blowing in the nice cool hot summer breeze. Until… A big chunk of wind came crashing in. My hair was blowing everywhere. I couldn’t see anything or hear anything. The only  annoying thing is that I could only hear my mother. I strided down to the back door but the wind was so strong that I couldn’t even open the door. I ran to a dandelion and I made a big wish, “I wish the wind would go away.” I started to sob. I was cold because the wind was so freezing. My teeth started chattering UNTIL…the wind went away. I could finally open the door gently. As soon as I got into the house, the wind started AGAIN!!

6 comments:

  1. I really like the peace of writing from xhan

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  2. good detail in your story writing.try to use some similes to get the readers acention.miriama your story was intresting.
    MAIA

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  3. great prove it Miriama
    Ashar

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  4. you added a lot of detail. By Alexi rm14

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  5. I could see a clear image of your story in my mind but my opinion is that the story does not make much sense. from Elizabeth

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  6. i like how you tried to make it make sense by desiree.

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