Tuesday, 10 November 2015

Jaida's Writing


The Volcano
                                                                                                                                        

The hot orange sun slowly drifted up into the bright, blue, bulging horizon meanwhile, the scorching volcano was boiling and bubbling waiting to explode like a kettle ready to take off. The dangerous, explosive volcano was bursting out red, hot lava through little lava streams. As I was watching the sunrise on the tour, the volcano was trying to give the group a sign that it was ready to burst…. BOOM!!! The volcano erupted out fiery lava balls as hot as the sun. It went a trillion kilometers far, further than Mars. It was like fireworks exploding in the dark, black, night sky with beautiful rainbow colours Yellow! Orange! Red! All in a row. I started running to the car to hop in and drive away but the car was locked and I had lost my keys on the tour! As I ran, as fast as I could, the hot lava was racing towards me. Suddenly I felt my body getting pushed against my car, my hands were glued to the car. I could feel the heat getting hotter and hotter as the lava was getting closer and closer to me. As (When) the lava was one meter (away) from getting to me, I took a deep breath and suddenly my feet started lifting up off the ground into the sky! “What is happening to me?” I shouted. I wasn’t that mad because the lava just reached my car and melted it until there was one piece left that was my stone that I collected on the tour. Then my body started to move in mid air like I was flying!

1 comment:

  1. WOW! Nice adjectives. That really hooked me in. Next time use some complex conjunctions.kallum

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