Miriama’s Independent Writing.
A Red Riding Hood story.
“Please NO!” cried Little Red Riding Hood, to the Big Bad Wolf. Little Red Riding Hood sprinted like a cheetah running for it(’)s pray. She ran through a maze of cacti in the desert.
The wolf followed behind closely dribbling slurrpy sticky seliver and sweating. “I want you!” Demanded the Big Bad Wolf. The wolf started to slurp and jog a little slower. Until… He started running out of breath and puffing, (very hard.) He found a water hold and had a little slurp.
He strided past Little Red Riding Hood and hid behind a cactus. When Little Red Riding Hood came running past. He POUNCED(!) at Little Red Riding Hood at 1000 miles an hour. The Big Bad Wolf was going so fast that he didn’t realise the massive rock in front of him. TRIP! BANG! CRASH! OWCH! Little Red Riding Hood couldn’t hold it in “HA!HA!”
She laughed out loud. Then the wolf started to laugh to. They both smiled at each other and the wolf said, “Sorry.” The wolf and the girl decided to be friends.
“I was just hungry” Mumbled the wolf. They lived Happily ever after!
The End
I love the simile that you yoused in your writing.Grayson
ReplyDeleteGreat story Miriama.I can imagine the whole story in my head.Divyansh
ReplyDeleteGreat adjectives.I could see the picture in my head.Justin
ReplyDeleteI like that story maybe you could you's more verbs. by desiree
ReplyDeleteGreat story Mirlama.I can amagin the whole story in my head and I think you could move up the learning leavels.
ReplyDeleteNice Descriptive Story Miri, with a great twist at the end! (Jaida's Mum)
ReplyDeleteThat was a great story miri by jack
ReplyDeleteawesome detail mirlama. lynken
ReplyDeleteAwesome onomatopoeia Mirlama.Jessica
ReplyDeleteso funny hahaha! from ELIZABETH!
ReplyDeleteamazing onomatopoeia. kallum and ryley
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